Major Project - Defining an Identity as a Screenwriter

Something that my lecturer has told me that I need to work on as a concept is giving the writing style I use more of an identity. This is something that I can understand as I want this series to have characters that audiences can relate to. Another thing i've been told is to not be so overly descriptive and to take out some concepts such as the Dream Sequence at the start of Episode 1. The Dream Sequence would take audiences too far away from the action of the shows concept and is a lazy way of describing how he becomes hyper aware and paranoid of his surroundings.

I've scrapped the dream sequence and made a different approach to the Dream Sequence
which involves a special chip given to Elliott after a car accident.

One thing I want to concentrate on for Different Perspectives is to cut back on a lot of the unnecessary detail from the location description, plus characters. Just state exactly what I want to have shown. Making strongly-defined characters is something I need to work on more, as well as giving the series more unique twists and turns. It's very difficult sometimes, to work in a medium you haven't had very much experience in. This is why I wanted to work on this concept since last year. One more thing i've realised is that screenplays are emulating and pro-conceiving a visual medium so you have to write visually. One way or another, as you keep writing you learn what "writing visually" means. Things that work in your own head might not exactly work translated to the big screen.